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IMDB rating: 5.30 Plot: Routinely exploited by her wicked stepmother, the downtrodden Sam Martin is excited about the prospect of meeting her Internet beau at the school’s Halloween dance. |
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Do you like this idea?
Okay, so I’m sure this is going to suck, but how is this idea for a story? I kind of wanted to write a very modern day version of Romeo & Juliette and Cinderella with a much happier ending, and a bit of a love triangle twist to it.
Okay, so there’s a girl who lives with one family and a boy who lives with another. The kids don’t hate eachothers families, but the parents hate eachother with a passion because of their leaves in the yards and stupid shit like that. The girl and boy go to school together and don’t really pay attention to eachother. The boy is dating the most popular bitch at school and stuff. Well, one day after the girls stepmother screams at her and slaps her, the girl leaves out to an old ass deserted park and swings while she cries because she misses her dad and mom (Mom’s dead, Dad’s away on business) and hates her life and two younger step sisters and blah blah. Then, the jock boy from the opposite family comes because his parents keep trying to make him go to a certain college and play football and his gf is being a hoe and blah blah and they hit it off. The rest of the story is them sneaking around until they both take off and all it happily ever after.
How’s that?
bad, huh?
-I was raised a smartass, so i do curse alot. My bad. Habit. And i’m fourteen.
-Second, of course it’s going to have elements of other Juliette and Cinderellie movies, it’s a twist off for a damned freaking reason.
-I said, "certain collage" not "the right college. Jeez, pay attention.
-And for the last answerer, I’m fourteen and screw off you crazed freaking creeper and find something better to do than bash on other peoples crap. Got it? Good.
Sorry if that was a bit mean, i have a terrible temper.
Another little things, IT IS A SUMMERY! I’m worrying about my "Terrible vocabulary and how sterotypical it sounds and what not." Its a brainstorming thing. Jeez, if you bash on this, do it sort of nicely, will ya?
You swear a lot. And that story has been used a lot in movies, like modern day romeo and juliet, which sucks. But you’re putting a different twist to it… it will be fun to write. Try it.
Edit: Hey, for the "it sucks" part, I meant that as it sucks that it’s been used in movies a lot. By the way, what’s your zodiac sign?
Ms.Pokerlee-SlapsYahoo | Nov 14, 2009
it sounds great. Not that bad at this point.
I_love_books | Nov 14, 2009
sounds good to me… lol it could be a classic disney cartoon since the mom is dead
Elijah B | Nov 14, 2009
It’s not bad, but since you are borrowing a lot of story elements from well known stories, readers might catch that and think its a little cliched (however you spell it). I would maybe tweak the plot just a little bit so its not so similar to Romeo and Juliet and Cinderella. Other than that, its great
Answer mine?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index? qid=20091114163255AABsLnE&r=w
thenorrist18 | Nov 14, 2009
The whole thing about the ‘going to the right college’ bit is very stereotypical.
Try to make it not so stereotypical.
Many romantic stories these days are so stereotypical.
Savannah | Nov 14, 2009
aw its cute! can you look at mine?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index; _ylt=AqaBFmW6W2XF_YhgOt7mr1fsy6IX;_ylv=3 ?qid=20091111173946AAheaTw
Kaylen | Nov 14, 2009
thats a good idea actually. just try to swear a liiittle less
Bella | Nov 14, 2009
Sounds like the most cliche, trite shit I’ve ever read in my life. How old are you?
Ion Square | Nov 14, 2009
Sounds a lot like "A Cinderella Story." And aside from the two sets of parents bickering over trivial things, you don’t have much "romeo and juliet" in it. I think you need to make a few more changes for it to be more original. Also, expand your vocabulary a bit so you can use more effective words in the place of the cussing. Cussing is a crutch for a small vocabulary.
hobo | Nov 14, 2009
not terrible but very cliche…why not come up with your own ideas?
miss_kitty_1984 | Nov 14, 2009
I think it sounds good, but they shouldn’t run off in the end, that doesn’t set a good example.
TMJ | Nov 14, 2009
it’s very……typical. y not grow the characters up a bit and say that the boy’s parents are trying to make him marry a certain girl who is totally…idk……backstabbing, ya know? and the girl’s case could be her dad dies and her mom is busy with other siblings or somthing like that. make her like poor or something. come up with your own story line. make it your own. and if you can’t think of anything try this: sit down at your pc and just start typing about anything and everything and things eventually pop into your head. it really works. better than just staring at the wall.
crazy ex-girlfriend! | Nov 14, 2009
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